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*Yvonne writing*

Penelope: Hey Yvee! What are you writing?

Yvonne: A fanfic!

Penelope: Oh? About what?

Yvonne: You and Callisto, and the genre is romance

Penelope: wait- what?

Yvonne: Yeah, he commissioned me, I’m getting paid

Callisto: I told you to keep it a secret!

The actual greek letter and its translation

Μαζί σου, έμαθα καινούργια πράγματα που δεν ήξερα για μένα. Στην αρχή δεν μπορούσα να δεχτώ αυτή την απαγορευμένη αγάπη, αλλά τώρα όταν σε βλέπω, τα αισθήματα μου ξεχειλίζουν.

Αγαπώ μια χώρα και μιλάω μια γλώσσα που δε γνώριζα καθόλου. Όσο περισσότερο γνωρίζω τη χώρα σου, τόσο περισσότερο σε καταλαβαίνω. Ξέρω από που πηγάζει αυτό το πάθος σου και όλο και πιο πολύ το θαυμάζω και αγαπώ.

Το χρώμα του δέρματος σου και τα μάτια σου μου θυμίζουν το γαλανόλευκο της σημαίας μου και πιστεύω στην αιωνιότητα του αστεριού της σημαίας της πατρίδας σου που ταξιδεύει στο κόκκινο χρώμα της και συμβολίζει τη ζωή, που εσύ δε θα διαστάσεις να θυσιάσεις.

Για μένα είσαι όλα τα λάβαρα όλων των Εθνών, όλου του κόσμου. Όταν σε σκέφτομαι τα σύνορα, το χρώμα κάθε ανθρώπου και τα σύμβολα τους χάνονται. Όταν σε σκέφτομαι χάνομαι.

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With you, I learn new things I didn’t know about myself. At first I couldn’t accept this forbidden love, but now when I see you, my feelings boil over/overwhelm me.

I love a country and I speak a language I never knew. The more I get to know your country the better I understand you. I know the source of your passion and more and more I admire and love it.

The color of your skin and your eyes remind me of the blue and white of my flag and I believe in the eternity of the star on your country’s flag that travels/sails on its red color and embodies the life you won’t hesitate to sucrifice.

For me you are the flags of all the nations, of all the people. When I think of you the borders, the color of every person and their flags disappear. When I think of you I disappear.

Tips on Pacing

We, as creators, seek that hook that gets the readers invested and keeps them that way. Nothing does that better than tension. There are all kinds, but it often occurs between characters. The "do they like me" of romance, the interruptions of erotica, the intense adversary from an unknown opponent, or the whodunits of mystery; Tension comes in all shapes and sizes, but it boils down to one thing, leaving the readers holding their breath in anticipation of the next page.

A large part of the creative process is figuring out how to create that tension without leaving the readers wanting to quit out of frustration or confusion. I would like to say there is a correct way to pace things, but it depends entirely on the story and situation.

Action scenes, for example, move very quickly, whereas a scene with a lot of dialogue will move at a snail’s pace. A spicy scene will emulate real life, moving slowly at first and increase its pace. A dramatic scene can be either fast or slow, depending on what it contains.

There are the peaceful scenes that do not move the same as any other kind of scene, showing the contentment of characters, the sun setting, or moving from one place to another. In writing or showing these scenes in a comic, it will go very quickly but the reader will perceive them as slow.

Showing a car ride, or a cooking scene allows characters to reflect on what has been happening and offers character development, but it does not have that tension at all. Still, adding those scenes is like adding bread to your butter. Now, everyone has their own tastes, but I would find it very odd to find someone who would consume just butter, especially if it was unsalted. Adding those peaceful scenes makes the ones that aren’t, all the more impactful, to both your readers and your characters.

The calm before the storm does wonders in storytelling, but the one thing you want to avoid is spending too much time in that calm. An example of this would be The Hobbit. Now, I love The Hobbit. It’s a classic hero’s journey, with a deep world build and rich characters, but parts of it are unnecessarily wordy. There is a page that describes the moss on the trees in such detail that you can taste it, which shows Tolkien’s skills as a wordsmith, but it was ultimately padding.

waits for the rage. Padding; words that don’t move your plot forward and only add to your word/panel count. Padding or filler should not be confused with peaceful scenes. Peaceful scenes will add to your story, padding will not. The literary world has changed a lot since Tolkien wrote The Hobbit, and we can see that evident in modern literature by the fact that there would hardly be a mention of trees at all, let alone the moss that grows upon them.

The next subject of pacing is sentence variation and flow. Now, flow is a tricky subject, and is not often resolved during the initial draft. When I am editing, things will sometimes be in the wrong order and disrupt flow. When flow is off, tension wanes, and when tension wanes, readers will lose interest. There may be entire scenes that I think don’t work where they are, but rather than delete those scenes, I find a place where they fit better. Perhaps that place is earlier, perhaps it is later. If you thought that scene was necessary when you wrote it, perhaps there is a proper place for it.

In A Galactic Star, the episode titled Repercussions, was supposed to happen right before the climax. I moved it up to allow the reader to understand Chrome’s hesitations between him and Neon.

Even in comics, you aren’t going to necessarily catch things after you just completed them. Many indie creators will recommend a space between writing the initial draft and editing it. The amount of time varies per person, but it is suggested to at least give it a day. The reason is because of the completion high; You just created this thing and in your mind it is amazing and awesome, not seeing the mistakes that are there. I feel as though editing is like polishing a stone; Every stone, no matter how grey or plain in appearance, can be polished into a stunning masterpiece if given enough time.

The editing process has multiple phases, the first is checking for spelling and grammar mistakes, and the second is checking the sentence structure for flow. Example: The loud dog barked. Vs. The dog barked loudly. The first is grammatically correct but makes you pause to process, whereas the second will allow you to move on to the next sentence without that stop.

Flow is a key component in pacing, which is a key component in tension, which keeps your readers engaged. As a potential reader of your story, I hope this will help you to bring it to life.

I hate how hot military men is like portrayed in the media because in real life military men are the worse I avoid then like a plague the only exception would be leonidas 😭

no because it's always them damn MILITARY MEN

Me cause if i plan the whole story I’ll overthink about the tiniest details😔

"Can't wait to see where you take this story" well I can't wait to see where this story takes me either

Writing Description Notes:

Updated 9th September 2024 More writing tips, review tips & writing description notes

Facial Expressions

Masking Emotions

Smiles/Smirks/Grins

Eye Contact/Eye Movements

Blushing

Voice/Tone

Body Language/Idle Movement

Thoughts/Thinking/Focusing/Distracted

Silence

Memories

Happy/Content/Comforted

Love/Romance

Sadness/Crying/Hurt

Confidence/Determination/Hopeful

Surprised/Shocked

Guilt/Regret

Disgusted/Jealous

Uncertain/Doubtful/Worried

Anger/Rage

Laughter

Confused

Speechless/Tongue Tied

Fear/Terrified

Mental Pain

Physical Pain

Tired/Drowsy/Exhausted

Eating

Drinking

Warm/Hot

“Dear Yildiz, Your words,your feelings are very familiar to me. The future is uncertain for all of us and I am in deep worry for you too. With feelings difficult to explain I’m trying to find my way out of a storm.I don’t even know where I’ll end up yet I hold some hope inside me. I’m doing everything in my power not to lose that hope. I imagine those eyes that help me find my way,those eyes that every time they look at me, they drag me to “heaven”. I find in myself the strength so that I can live one more day in that dream. You can’t imagine how much hurts my soul the possibility that those eyes may look at somebody else. My biggest wish is through this storm together with the owner of those eyes to make it to the same shore. However neither the owner of those eyes nor the person I want to reach the same shore is you. There’s no future between you and me. I’m writing this letter so that you won’t be left with any doubt in your mind. All your feelings regarding me are inane and unrequited. I ask you to accept this and find your own way.”

— Leon

When your Character...

Gets into: A Fight ⚜ ...Another Fight ⚜ ...Yet Another Fight

Hates Someone ⚜ Kisses Someone ⚜ Falls in Love

Calls Someone they Love ⚜ Dies / Cheats Death ⚜ Drowns

is...

A Ballerina ⚜ A Child ⚜ Interacting with a Child ⚜ A Cheerleader

A Cowboy ⚜ A Genius ⚜ A Lawyer ⚜ A Pirate ⚜ A Spy

A Wheelchair User ⚜ A Zombie ⚜ Beautiful ⚜ Dangerous ⚜ Drunk

Funny ⚜ In a Coma ⚜ In a Secret Society ⚜ Injured ⚜ Shy

needs...

A Magical Item ⚜ An Aphrodisiac ⚜ A Fictional Poison

A Coping Strategy ⚜ A Drink ⚜ A Medicinal Herb ⚜ A Mentor

Money ⚜ A Persuasion Tactic ⚜ A Quirk ⚜ To be Killed Off

To Become Likable ⚜ To Clean a Wound ⚜ To Self-Reflect

To Find the Right Word, but Can't ⚜ To Say No ⚜ To Swear

loves...

Astronomy ⚜ Baking ⚜ Cooking ⚜ Cocktails ⚜ Food ⚜ Oils

Dancing ⚜ Fashion ⚜ Gems ⚜ Herbal Remedies ⚜ Honey

Mushrooms ⚜ Mythology ⚜ Numbers ⚜ Perfumes

Roses ⚜ Sweets ⚜ To Argue ⚜ To Insult ⚜ To Kiss

To Make False Claims ⚜ Wine ⚜ Wine-Tasting ⚜ Yoga

has/experiences...

Allergies ⚜ Amnesia ⚜ Bereavement ⚜ Bites & Stings

Bruises ⚜ Caffeine ⚜ CO Poisoning ⚜ Color Blindness

Facial Hair ⚜ Fainting ⚜ Fevers ⚜ Food Allergies

Food Poisoning ⚜ Fractures ⚜ Frostbite ⚜ Hypothermia

Injuries ⚜ Jet Lag ⚜ Kidnapping ⚜ Manipulation ⚜ Mutism

Pain ⚜ Paranoia ⚜ Poisoning ⚜ More Pain & Violence

Scars ⚜ Trauma ⚜ Viruses ⚜ Wounds

[these are just quick references. more research may be needed to write your story...]

Writing Resources PDFs

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