The Untamed - No Children

I love your writing tips so much btw!

What I’m currently struggling with is the repetition of the word « as » in my writing.

ex: « As they walked up the road, […] » or « She ate her meal as he sat down besides her » or « The water reflected the suns light as it rose »

I feel like its simply my lack of creativity in phrase structure sometimes…

Hi! So glad you've found them helpful ❤

You're right that overusing "as" can make sentences feel repetitive, but you're not lacking creativity—you're just leaning on a familiar structure. I had a similar problem with the word "before" in sentences like "she glanced at him before looking away." Here are some tips and examples that I found helpful.

Rephrase/change the structure.

instead of: as she walked up the road, the wind howled. try: she walked up the road, the howling wind whipping her hair into her face.

Use participial phrases.

instead of: she ate her meal as he sat down beside her. try: she ate her meal, barely looking up when he sat down beside her.

Break it into two sentences/parts.

instead of: the water reflected the sun’s light as it rose. try: the sun rose, its light shimmering on the water’s surface.

Use a different conjunction or preposition.

instead of: as they walked up the road, their footsteps echoed. try: their footsteps echoed while they walked up the road.

Imply simultaneity without stating it.

instead of: she ate her meal as he sat down beside her. try: he sat down beside her. she kept eating.

Whenever you catch yourself using or overusing a certain word, try to think of replacement words or rephrasings like these you could try instead. These small tweaks can help keep the flow natural while making your writing more dynamic. Hope this helped!

Previous | Next

ok jiang cheng renaissance time. back to basics. hard-edged steel-grade-dignified turning-up-his-nose jiang cheng who spits venom takes names and doesn't care to be outwardly soft because it was never his strong point anyway. a jiang cheng who's gruff and starts fights with anyone who'll try him, yes partly because he's standing up for his sect but at this point it's mostly because he just likes to yell and incite fear and he doesn't need a noble reason to be a bitch he can just be an argumentative asshole because he wants to be and he's got the flourishing sect to back him up on it now.

i want him to be in the wrong sometimes and never sorry for it. i want him to use a nasty tone and not give a fuck and not change himself because he's already succeeding as the person he is and hell if he'd lower his head to anyone for old luxuries like closure. time was his closure. he's done, he's mean, he's allowed to be. he was born full of barbs, grew up full of barbs, and flourished full of barbs. if he feels fulfilled and satisfied as he is, why should he ever change? he can fix his problems in his own way. he can find peace without sanding down his edges. he likes his edges. so what? so what? who says his happiness is wrong just because he doesn't fold and become sweet and gentle upon finding it? he'll do whatever he wants and that might include making you cry and never apologising for it. so what? so what? that's jiang-zongzhu to you.

minor convenience: *takes place*

Cultivators: *spit out a mouthful of blood*

“But if you forget to reblog Madame Zeroni, you and your family will be cursed for always and eternity.”

that jealousy is really burning through sprite

ETERNALS (2021) dir. Chloé Zhao

Writing Tips Master Post

Character writing/development:

Character Arcs

Making Character Profiles

Character Development

Comic Relief Arc

Internal Conflict

Creating Distinct Characters

Suicidal Urges/Martyr Complex

Creating Likeable Characters

Writing Strong Female Characters

Writing POC Characters

Character Voices

Plot devices/development:

Intrigue in Storytelling

Enemies to Lovers

Alternatives to Killing Characters

Worldbuilding

Misdirection

Consider Before Killing Characters

Foreshadowing

Narrative:

Emphasising the Stakes

Avoid Info-Dumping

Writing Without Dialogue

1st vs. 2nd vs. 3rd Perspective

Fight Scenes (More)

Transitions

Pacing

Dialogue Tips

Writing Cheating

Book writing:

Connected vs. Stand-Alone Series

A & B Stories

Writer resources:

Writing YouTube Channels, Podcasts, & Blogs

Online Writing Resources

Outlining/Writing/Editing Software

Miscellaneous:

Overcoming Writer's Block

1000 Follower Special

Writing Fantasy

Character Ask Game

Character Ask Game #2

insp.

babe wake up new hozier lyrics just dropped

Scott is literally the good moral compass of the group of course he gave people seconds chances. But let’s remember Theo’s second chance was done by Liam and Scott allowed to save Stiles. Scott gave Derek a chance after like what the first 2 seasons. Which makes sense because in the first 2 seasons Derek was this asshole he didn’t know with murderous intentions. By season 3 Scott trust Derek as much as Derek allows (Derek with his secretive ways, I mean). And he did not treat Stiles like dirt, let’s be real (if anything it was the other way around but I love their friendship so I won’t even say that). Scott does whatever he can for stiles and vice versa. He never shamed stiles for anything at all, they had 1 misunderstanding the whole show and it was on both of them. Also please name a time he blamed someone for what was happening around him, (besides Derek and Peter in season 1)

Star Trek: Deep Space Nine "Past Tense, Pt. 1"