from an indie author who's published 4 books and written 20+, as well as 400k in fanfiction (who is also a professional beta reader who encounters the same issues in my clients' books over and over)
show don't tell is every bit as important as they say it is, no matter how sick you are of hearing about it. "the floor shifted beneath her feet" hits harder than "she felt sick with shock."
no head hopping. if you want to change pov mid scene, put a scene break. you can change it multiple times in the same scene! just put a break so your readers know you've changed pov.
if you have to infodump, do it through dialogue instead of exposition. your reader will feel like they're learning alongside the character, and it will flow naturally into your story.
never open your book with an exposition dump. instead, your opening scene should drop into the heart of the action with little to no context. raise questions to the reader and sprinkle in the answers bit by bit. let your reader discover the context slowly instead of holding their hand from the start. trust your reader; donn't overexplain the details. this is how you create a perfect hook.
every chapter should end on a cliffhanger. doesn't have to be major, can be as simple as ending a chapter mid conversation and picking it up immediately on the next one. tease your reader and make them need to turn the page.
every scene should subvert the character's expectations, as big as a plot twist or as small as a conversation having a surprising outcome. scenes that meet the character's expectations, such as a boring supply run, should be summarized.
arrive late and leave early to every scene. if you're character's at a party, open with them mid conversation instead of describing how they got dressed, left their house, arrived at the party, (because those things don't subvert their expectations). and when you're done with the reason for the scene is there, i.e. an important conversation, end it. once you've shown what you needed to show, get out, instead of describing your character commuting home (because it doesn't subvert expectations!)
epithets are the devil. "the blond man smiled--" you've lost me. use their name. use it often. don't be afraid of it. the reader won't get tired of it. it will serve you far better than epithets, especially if you have two people of the same pronouns interacting.
your character should always be working towards a goal, internal or external (i.e learning to love themself/killing the villain.) try to establish that goal as soon as possible in the reader's mind. the goal can change, the goal can evolve. as long as the reader knows the character isn't floating aimlessly through the world around them with no agency and no desire. that gets boring fast.
plan scenes that you know you'll have fun writing, instead of scenes that might seem cool in your head but you know you'll loathe every second of. besides the fact that your top priority in writing should be writing for only yourself and having fun, if you're just dragging through a scene you really hate, the scene will suffer for it, and readers can tell. the scenes i get the most praise on are always the scenes i had the most fun writing. an ideal outline shouldn't have parts that make you groan to look at. you'll thank yourself later.
happy writing :)
I love the notes I gave myself during my first draft. I think one of my favorites is: we need to standardize pet names.
First draft: "I’ll fix this later."
Editing phase: "WHO WROTE THIS TRASH AND WHY DID THEY THINK THEY WERE A WRITER?"
And there’s no inbetween
Going back to old writing is either just like:
1. “Who wrote this masterpiece?! It was ME?!”
2. “Who wrote this absolute shit? Oh fuck my life, that was me, wasn’t it?”
Okay but also, it’s okay for stuff to be “ooc” sometimes. I know most of what I read is canon divergence or some type of alternate universe situation. The characters in in a different context, often with different backstories and relationships with each other. So duh, they’re gonna do and say shit they wouldn’t in canon.
Especially because most fanfic is some type of romance or erotica, and a lot of popular fandoms are targeted for younger audiences so any romance is the most minor of plot lines, if it even exists at all. Forget sex.
So it’s okay if someone says something that you can’t picture them saying. There in a different genre and maybe even a different world. Plus, just because you couldn’t picture it doesn’t mean the writer and everyone who enjoyed the fic couldn’t.
'he would not fucking say that' maybe he would if he knew he was starring in his very own porn fic for the sole purpose of delighting some freaks on archive of our own dot org. maybe he'd play it up for the cameras. ever consider that
Writing because murder is illegal, going to space is expensive and magical creatures apparently don't exist...
The biggest compliment ever is when someone sees your creative work and says that they’re now inspired to go out and create something, too
I think I’ve been putting too much pressure on myself lately. I’m trying to revise some poems for my slam team and write a second draft of a fic (that is almost a complete rewrite because I wanna change too much), and I’ve been struggling to get anything done because I want my writing to sound like my favorite writers.
I will try to let go and see how much I get done before I go over to friends house in about an hour
Nothing frustrates more than the realization that the world behind your eyes will never look back at you like a mirror from the page. But the frustration dissipates when you realize that if you fill the entire page so airtight with your world, then there would be no room for the reader.
Have I written every day since I made my schedule?
Yes.
Did on work on any of my wips?
No.
Did I start a new story and get way too invested?
Hell yeah!
I just made an actual schedule for what writing projects I should focus on each day for the next week. So that way I can hopefully make progress on my fic and on revising poems for my slam team at the same time. We’ll see if the adhd cooperates.
actually I love using my disability as a crutch and an excuse and I think all disabled people should be allowed to do it as much as we want
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