MY REVIEW OF EPISODE 3!
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Summary of the episode: The episode follows the hotel as they do trust exercises, Charlie puts vaggie in changes. In plot B, we follow Alastor as he goes to an overlord meeting.
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My problems short formed:
● so much was going on, but it was still boring
● Some things should be saved for another episode
● cut back on characters
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My problems long formed:
● this episode was really boring. It just was a miss for me, I mean, we knew about the angel head. I was surprised when Velvette had the angel head, and Camille was the one that did it, but the shock was over because after that episode, we got nothing on angel head at all.
So I suggest separating Vaggie plot for her own episode, then leave this episode to Camille and velvette as a whole. Before I forget, I suggested in my earlier reviews, keeping the audience from knowing about the angel head, and then when the angel head is thrown, I just know all the audience would be completely focus.
● like I said, vaggie should have an episode focused on her. And who she is without charlie, all the people I seen who like vaggie only like her because she with Charlie.
And I personally feel like you should like the characters for who they are, not who they are with. And for vaggie without or with Charlie, she basically summed up to be angry, doesn't trust anyone, and without a second thought, and pull out her spear.
(I just find it funny that vaggie doesn't do anything with her spear fighting wise until the last couple of episodes)
● I suggest, to cut back on characters, and the overlords could be those characters. I mean, none of them even really spoke except maybe 6.
I think the episode should've the overlords meeting being canceled because everyone was busy or made up excuses on why they didn't show up.
My rewrite:
So we see Camila working, then velvette kick the door open.
Velvette is demanding for Camila use the information she knows. Camila doesn't want to be part of it.
Then velvette talk about how in recent years Camila has been losing more respect form the overlords. Then respectless happens, and then velvette is kicked out. As Camila starts to be more tense, her shadow starts to stretch out, becoming alastor shadow.
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Over all 6/10
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Wow, it has been a hot minute since I did a review post. But life has been kicking me hard by keeping me busy. I'm so sorry to keep you all waiting.
while revising some of my ocs, i realized how odd it is that everyone in the hellverse either speaks english or has it as a secondary language. putting aside the reality of hazbin/helluva being tv shows produced in america by americans, there should be a LOT more characters who primarily speak a language other than english or use outdated english (and no zestial doesn't count the mf was in like one episode). i also want to see more bilingual characters that aren't spanish. where are the french-americans. where are the russian-americans. it can not be hard to find voice actors who speak a language other than english and spanish.
Merlin: Ok, so I assigned Edward to be your servant for the week. And I had-
Arthur: Really Merlin, Camelot won't fall apart if you're gone for a few days.
Merlin: 🤨 *Sceptical but finishing cleaning up Arthur's bed*
Merlin: *Rolls eyes* Well, if that is all. Take care of yourself and I'll be back in the week.
Arthur: *Nods* Be sure to tell Hunith my regards.
Merlin: *Smiles*
Arthur: *Blushes*
Merlin: Lancelot, I'm heading to Ealdor. Finally got the Prat to let me have my days off. But I hate to ask this, can you please keep an eye on Arthur for me?
Lancelot: Of course my friend. You can count on me.
Merlin: No seriously Lance, this is Arthur we're talking about. With him you'll need to keep constant vigilance.
Lancelot: It'll be OK Merlin. I promise, nothing will happen to Arthur while you're away.
Merlin: *Deeply sceptical but seriously needs a vacation*
Merlin: OK.
Lancelot: 😊 Have faith. How much trouble can Arthur get into within a week?
[ONE WEEK LATER]
Merlin: *Back from Ealdor*
Camelot: MERLIN'S BACK! *Cue cries of relief*
Leon: Thank the gods! *Grabs Merlin before he could protest and informs him of the others*
[KING'S CHAMBERS]
Merlin: 😑 Arthur...
Arthur: *Looks away*
Merlin: 💢 Arthur James Pendragon, tell me why Gwaine and half of your council are in the dungeons, and why Lance is in the corner crying and- IS THAT AN ARROW IN YOUR ARM?!!! ‼️😠🗯️
Arthur: *Sweats* 💦
Lancelot: *Mumbling* It all happened so fast... The first day was fine it was normal.. Then.. Then.. 😭😭
Leon the only Sane One left: Then Arthur didn't like the servant serving him, firing them on the spot. Next came Gwaine commenting on Arthur looks without Merlin around. Then they started arguing and Gwaine went into the dungeons to prove some point about something.
Arthur: *Mutters* He said I wouldn't last a day. Told him he can't last sober.
Merlin: 🤨
Leon: *Sighs long suffering* Then a sorcerer, no more then a young boy came trying to kill Arthur and failed. He fell over Arthur's messy room and knocked himself unconscious.
Merlin: 😦
Leon: Next the council wanted to burn the boy but Arthur wouldn't have it and tossed half of them in the dungeons.
Merlin: 😑
Arthur: 😅
Leon: And today, when training, An assassin tried to kill Arthur and would have succeeded if not for the sorcerer boy who was again attempting to kill Arthur but moved him out of the way slightly instead.
Merlin: 😓 And where is Gaius?
Leon: There is a birth happening in the lower town.
Merlin: ... Get my Medical Bag and I'll take care of the wound. *Sighs* I was only gone for a week...
Lancelot: And Never again.
Arthur and Leon: *Nods*
Camelot: Never Leave us Merlin!
teeth! and wrinkles. i gave the bird teeth. and wrinkles.... so. hes more emotion... emotive...
this is the third try at uploading this
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Merlin and Leon being immortal doesn't stop any wounds from scarring, they play as a reminder of what kills them every single time, and they can very much still feel pain from them.
So they took to treating the others wounds whenever they’re bothering them after they found out about each others immortality.
I'd imagine they both always have backup bandages and salve with them just in case the others scars start to bother them.
They sneak into each other's chambers (mainly Leon's) whenever they want to check over the other's scars, which most of the time ends up with them falling asleep in each other's rooms (which has caused many rumors..)
They also have matching scars, Merlin's burn scar from Nimueh and Leon's burn scars from Kilgharrah (headcanon) so they know exactly what the other went through.
Incorrect merlin quotes as comics inspired by this post by @wishiwasadruid
I had to add Gwaine tho i feel like he fits right in there thirsting over Merlin X))
Incorrect merlin quotes series 5/?
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Does anyone remember that velvette supposed to be a witch/potion maker?
I sure didn't!
I was checking her wiki because I wanted to include something about her during a conversation with my friend.
And I read about how she made love potions with the help of Valentino. And then I remember the whole she is a witch/influencer/fashion designer.
I don't know whether making her have a talent in potion making is a good idea when everyone forgets. Or it mashed in with her other stuff.
So viv, if you knew that line was gonna trouble, why didn't you or your team add something to show that Satan was lying
I mean, one way you could have fixed it is by having Oz or Bee saying something about it instead of them looking awkwardly towards Lucifer chair and then to each other
This is how I would probably rewrite the scene to have Oz and Bee saying something about Satan lying
Satan says, "I am the mastermind, and here I am the law. I've ruled the endless dark since long before the golden angel's fall."
Oz quickly whispers to Bee. "Here he goes with his lying bs."
"I know! And it is not like anyone believes this. Everyone knows that Lucifer was here before any of us!" Whisper Bee
Then, before Oz could respond, Mammon loudly shush him
Is this a rewrite of this scene the greatest ever? Absolutely not
I tried my best, and I guarantee someone has a better idea of how to rewrite this scene. But this is how I would fix the scene.
If you guys have any ideas on how to rewrite this scene, please do tell!
Taken to the West
He did it squad. He turned around.
Macaque's ears for this particular Au are based off of Wukong, MK, and XiaoXiao's fur color~
this was a lot of fun to make! I truly do not know how bringing two infants on their journey would... work. Cause MAN things can get crazy really fast.
BUT HEY! Wukong is a happy Papa :D
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I'm continuing my very lengthy ff (after I finally finished my exams whoop) and I'm currently in a scene where Morgana thinks there is an intruder in the castle but it turns out it's just Percy and Gwaine making out in the middle of the hallway and I just wrote the sentence:
"How well I will sleep tonight, knowing, should someone decide to kidnap me again, they will be scared off by Arthur's troops of excited manwhores."
And how is your day going?
I really wished they had let everyone have a chance to pick something out for the exercises & not just Angel. It could’ve been a fun way to not only show trust to the gang to let them pick out things to try but also help show each other different ways to get to know them better aswell as us the audience.
Charlie’s choice could’ve been the Trust Falls! Or something else traditional such as icebreakers, blindfolds or egg drops(perhaps the egg bois could’ve helped)! Of everyone having the most conventional ideas. I can absolutely see her want to do a karaoke night too if not for this but some point with them🎤 I could also see her or Vaggie suggest an escape room!
Vaggie could’ve still wanted to do something like the Doomsday District fight. Many pointed out the two side arguments(it did work in the show, they can’t normally die but on the other hand it’s still pretty dangerous, probably something that’d get you in legal trouble🤣). Maybe it could’ve cut To Vaggie initially wanting to do it before Charlie suggests something a tad less hectic. Cue them fighting via paint ball or Laster-Tag! Remeber that family guy paintball scene🤣
Angel Dust’s choice could’ve still been the BDSM club, or perhaps something like hitting up a LGBTQ/Drag Bar or even do makeovers with each other 💄💇🏽♀️👗👔 maybe Angel could’ve suggested a BDSM theme escape room. If Al was part of it I think he’d just break the wall to escape🤣
Niffty could’ve suggested something involving arts n crafts or perhaps have the gang help her with something involving pest control in the hotel🪳🪳🪳
Husk could’ve suggested going to a casino horse racing. Trusting the gang to pick out the best horse to put money on because his all choices were crap🤣🐎🏇💰
Sir Pentious-Perhaps would suggest a sorta workshop thing lie, trying to make a new weapon-new furniture together 🛠️🪚🪑 maybe like how they tried to put together that shelf in Sonic Boom🤣
If Al had stuck around, maybe he’d suggest deer hunting or perhaps even cooking(Al-We don’t need to get rid of the egg bois entirely, just keep the numbers small enough, I’d love to help) 🍳🦌.
Alastor-This is my mother’s recipe for eggs sardou(Louisiana Creole egg dish)! With just one change to the type of eggs.
On an unrelated note, I think instead of initially trying to get rid of the egg bois(Charlie & Angel have are allowed to have pets), they just want to limit the number of egg bois around so they can’t cause as much trouble. Imagine a montage of the various ways they die throughout the exercises🤣🍳 kill two birds with one stone.
In general, I think it would’ve been better if Charlie & Vaggie actually had a proper sit down & plan out with each other and/or with them on what to actually do for the trust thing rather than rush right into it with just the trust falls & putting it soon on Vaggie to lead(I kinda came up with a deeper reason of why Charlie decided to do that). That whole ep was def a trust exercise more for Chaggie, about them needing to communicate to each other better & learn to understand each other, think of what the others actually feeling/thinking & being honest/there for each other. I wished we had gotten to see more of the trust between the gang build up too, along with Chaggie. Or perhaps have it focused on the gang first & have the Chaggie stuff focused for another moment.
I def would’ve wanted something like this for 🌈 My Hazbins 🌈 that or they each split into pairs of the people that distrust/dislike each other the most or have the whole thing be an escape room thing. My Baxter would probably suggest something like a pairing dissection thing(def would’ve something very not legal like real life surgery game🤣🤣🤣)
What do u think? Anything u think they could’ve done for the trust exercises? I’d love to know💖