You hit the ground with a crack. Back arched, mouth opened in a silent scream, your lungs a vacuum of nothing but mind-numbing fire. Spider-web fractures blossom beneath you. A grotesque pair of wings belying your own divinity. You sputter choked sobs, a spittle of blood dripping from between your cut lips and down your cheek.Β
"The gods are cruel," said He. He whose form transcends mortal eyes, cloaked by storm clouds with a voice as deep a rumbling thunder. Your Destiny. Your Demon. Your Bane. "But perhaps they are most cruel to you."
Canβt stop thinking about their romance scene _(:3γβ )_
How the Leverage team hears Sophieβs accent. The Rashomon Job, S3E11.
Do you ever find yourself over-using the word βrunβ (or βranβ) in your writing? Try using these words instead:
sprint / sprinted
dash / dashed
dart / darted
bolt / bolted
race / raced
speed / sped
hurry / hurried
jog / jogged
bound / bounded
hustle / hustled
scurry / scurried
tear / tore
rush / rushed
charge / charged
barrel / barreled
zoom / zoomed
scuttle / scuttled
scamper / scampered
book it / booked it
leg it / legged it
(Iβm proud of the graphic, too.)
Mood:Β The immediate (and temporary) emotions of your character. A feeling of joy after kissing the girl they like; frustration after a busy day working a summer job at the fair; despair after somebody eats the last Oreo.
Situation:Β The plot and relationship contexts of your character. The apprehension they feel with a friend in the weeks following a nasty fight; the nerves felt in the week leading up to their big championship game; the frustration and boredom of being grounded after crashing the family car into the county creek.
Struggle:Β The core, deepfelt pain of your character, which often emerges from their background. The fear of failure from overly demanding parents; a deep longing for a family they never knew; a desperate need to be accepted after spending years as an outcast.
The above emotional motives all play an important role in driving your characterβs actions, muddying or even overriding their more logical intentions β just as it happens to the rest of us. (Weβre all human, after all.)
That being said, while your characterβs mood and situation will shift throughout the story, their struggle will remain constant: their true north, emotionally speaking. This struggle will always be at the root of their actions, even as you swap in new situations and moods.
Letβs say your characterβs name is Bethany, and her struggle is this: a deep fear of failure, stemming from her parentsβ impossible academic expectations, which conflicts with her own desire to finallyΒ experienceΒ the life she sees passing her by.
Her actions, while primarily driven by that struggle, are going to vary quite a bit depending on her situation and mood. For example, if itβs the night before a big test, she might blow off a friendβs invitation to a party so she can study.
But if the party is a weekΒ before the big test, and she finds a handwritten invitation in her notebook from Emma (the girl on the lacrosse team she has a crush on), Bethany might act differently. Maybe she feels a lightness and warmth in her cheeks as she reads Emmaβs note. Maybe she puts those textbooks away, and maybe, just maybe, sheΒ sneaks out the window and goes to the party.
But if Bethany finds the note after her parents just chewed her out for being ungrateful and not studying hard enough? Maybe Bethany doesnβt go to the party. Instead, maybe she reads Emmaβs note, trembles, then rips it in two, knowing she canβt disappoint her parents like that. Then she spends the rest of the evening studying. Alone.
All three kinds of emotional motives are important. Your characterβs struggle is the anchor, but their mood and situation are the ever-shifting masks you use to express their struggle in fresh ways.Β
And by the end of the story, hopefully your character will overcome their struggle β putting awayΒ the textbooks, sneaking out the window, and meeting their crush at a party. Maybe even having their first kiss.
Whatever the character, and whatever their struggle, Iβm sure youβll do great.Β
So good luck! And good writing.
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