definitions of terms during the writing, editing and publishing process
Acknowledgements: Text in which the author thanks those who’ve supported them.
Action beat: Short description that comes before, between or just after dialogue.
Adjective: A word that describes a noun.
Adverb: A word that describes a verb.
Adverbial phrase: A group of words that describe a verb.
Afterword: A concluding section, often reflecting on the book’s creation or providing additional context.
Anaphora: The deliberate repetition of words or phrases at the beginning of successive clauses for artistic effect.
Antagonist: An adversary. The character who creates obstacles and challenges for the protagonist, or behaves in a hostile fashion towards the protagonist.
Anti-protagonist: A protagonist whose own actions create opposition and conflict, often within themselves or against their own goals.
Apostrophe: A punctuation mark used to indicate possession, omission and, occasionally, a plural.
Appendix: Space in a book for material that doesn’t fit comfortably in the main text.
Asyndeton: Literary device through which a sentence’s structure follows the following pattern: A, B, C.
Back matter: Also end matter. Elements reserved for the back of a book, including appendix, glossary, endnotes, bibliography and index.
Beta reader: Test-reader who provides feedback on book.
Bibliography: List of all works cited in book, and any other work of interest to the reader.
Chapter drop: The space above and below the chapter title.
Character arc: Narrative that shows how a character changes and develops.
Characterization: The process of revealing a character's personality, traits and motives through actions and dialogue.
Colon: Punctuation mark that introduces additional/qualifying information about the clause it follows.
Comma splice: Two independent clauses joined by a comma rather than a conjunction or an alternative punctuation mark.
Conjunction: A word that connects clauses or sentences (e.g. ‘and’, ‘but’, ‘if’, ‘then’)
Copyediting: A review of grammar, punctuation, and spelling, ensuring consistency and accuracy in the manuscript's language.
Critique: Also manuscript evaluation. Report analysing a book’s strengths and weaknesses.
Denouement: The final part of the book in which all the plot strands are brought together and resolved.
Deuteragonist: A sidekick or confidante character who has the most influence on the protagonist, often helping them solve problems and overcome obstacles. Can be critical to driving the plot.
Developmental editing: Also structural editing. The improvement of a manuscript's structure, content, and overall narrative, focusing on big-picture elements. Attends to plot, characterisation, narration and pacing.
Dialogue tag: Also speech tag. Words that indicate which character is speaking (e.g. John said).
Dialogue: The lines characters speak in a book.
Diversity reader: Also sensitivity reader. Test-reader who checks for misrepresentation in books.
Double-page spread: Also DPS. The view of a printed book or PDF when opened so that the left- and right-hand pages are both visible.
Drama: The conflicts, emotional intensity, and impactful events that drive the plot and engage readers emotionally. The focus is on character relationships, motivations, and the consequences of their actions.
Dropped capital: Decorative first letter of the first word on the first line in a chapter. Larger than the rest of the text and drops down two lines or more.
Ellipsis: Punctuation mark that indicates a trailing-off or a pause.
End matter: Also back matter. Elements reserved for the back of a book, including appendix, glossary, endnotes, bibliography and index.
Endnote: Additional useful information at the end of a chapter or book.
Filter word: Verb that tells rather than shows (e.g. ‘noticed’, ‘seemed’, ‘spotted’, ‘saw’).
Folio: Somewhat old-fashioned term for page number. Also used to refer to a page.
Footnote: Additional useful information at the bottom of a page.
Foreword: A recommendation of the work written by someone other than the author.
Fourth wall: In books, the conceptual space between the characters and the readers.
Free indirect speech: Also free indirect style and free indirect discourse. Third-person narrative that holds the essence of first person thought or dialogue.
Front matter: Also prelims. Includes part title and title pages, foreword, preface and acknowledgements.
Full point: Period or full stop.
Full stop: Period or full point.
Glossary: Alphabetical list of important terms with explanations or definitions.
Habitual past tense: Uses ‘would’ or ‘used to’ with a verb to indicate events that happened routinely in a time past.
Half-title page: The first page of a book with any text on it; in a printed book, always a right-hand page. Contains only the main title of the book.
Head-hopping: Jumping from one character’s thoughts and internal experiences to another’s. Indicates viewpoint has been dropped.
Imprint: Publisher’s name.
Independent clause: A group of words that contains a subject and a predicate.
Index: Alphabetical list of all topics, themes, key terms and cited author names covered in the book, and the corresponding page numbers.
Information dump: Also word dump. Information that’s necessary to the story but isn’t artfully delivered, or weaved creatively into the narrative and dialogue.
Line editing: Also stylistic editing. The refining of a manuscript's language, focusing on consistency, clarity, flow and style at sentence level.
Maid-and-butler dialogue: Dialogue in which one character tells another something they already know so the reader can access backstory.
Manuscript evaluation: Also critique. Report analysing a book’s strengths and weaknesses.
Narrative arc: Also story arc. The structure and shape of a story.
Narrative authenticity: The believability and truthfulness of a story so that the characters and events feel real within the framework of the novel’s world.
Narrative distance: Also psychic distance. How close the reader feels to a character’s thoughts, emotions and experiences within a story.
Narrative: Story. The part of the book that’s narrated, excluding the dialogue.
Narrative style: The author's unique manner of storytelling, encompassing language, tone, viewpoint and other structural choices.
Narrative voice: The style, tone, and personality through which a narrator or character tells a story to readers.
Numerals, Arabic: 1, 2, 3 etc.
Numerals, Roman: i, ii, iii etc.
Omniscient: All-knowing. Refers to a viewpoint style in fiction writing.
Overwriting: Using too many words on the page. Often characterized by repetition and redundancy.
Page proofs: A file that’s reached a stage in the publishing process where the text and images of a manuscript have been laid out in their final format.
Pantser: A writer who doesn’t outline or plan story structure, but flies by the seat of their pants.
Period: Full stop or full point.
Perspective character: Also viewpoint character. The character through whose eyes the story is primarily told. The narrative lens through which readers experience events, thoughts, and emotions within the story.
Plot: The sequence of events in a novel.
Point of view: Also viewpoint and POV. Describes whose head we’re in when we read a book, or whose perspective we experience the story from.
Polysyndeton: Literary device through which a sentence’s structure follows the following pattern: A and B and C.
Predicate: The part of a sentence that contains a verb and that tells us something about what the subject’s doing or what they are.
Preface: An explanation of the purpose, scope and content of a book, and written by the author.
Prelims: Also front matter. Includes part title and title pages, foreword, preface and acknowledgements.
Pronoun: A word that replaces a noun (e.g. I, you, he, she, we, me, it, this, that, them those, myself, who, whom). Pronouns can act and be acted upon like any noun.
Proofreading: The final pre-publication quality-control stage of editing where any final literal errors and layout problems are flagged up. Comes after developmental editing, stylistic line editing and copyediting.
Proper noun: A named person, place or organization. Always takes an initial capital letter.
Protagonist: The leading character in a novel, often facing central conflicts and driving action.
Psychic distance: Also narrative distance. How close the reader feels to a character’s thoughts, emotions and experiences within a story.
Purple prose: Overblown, poorly structured writing with strings of extraneous and often multisyllabic adjectives and adverbs.
Quotation mark: Also speech mark. Punctuation that indicates the spoken word. Singles or doubles are acceptable.
Recto: The right-hand page of a book.
References: List of all the works cited in your book.
Roman typeface: Not italic.
Running head: Text that runs across the top of a page (e.g. title of the book, chapter title, author’s name).
Scene: a distinct segment or building block where specific actions and events unfold in a setting.
Scene technique: The use of dialogue, action, setting, and tension to craft compelling moments in the story.
Semi-colon: A punctuation mark that indicates a stronger pause than a comma between two main clauses.
Sensitivity reader: Also diversity reader. Test-reader who checks for misrepresentation in books.
Speech mark: Also quotation mark. Punctuation that indicates the spoken word. Singles or doubles are acceptable.
Speech tag: Also dialogue tag. Words that indicate which character is speaking (e.g. John said).
Story arc: Also narrative arc. The structure and shape of a story.
Structural editing: Also developmental editing. The improvement of a manuscript's structure, content, and overall narrative, focusing on big-picture elements. Attends to plot, characterisation, narration and pacing.
Style sheet: In which an author or editor records stylistic and language preferences, and tracks who’s who, what’s where, and when X, Y and Z happens.
Stylistic editing: Also line editing. The refining of a manuscript's language, focusing on consistency, clarity, flow and style at sentence level.
Subject: The thing in a sentence that’s doing or being something.
Subplot: A secondary storyline that supports and enhances the main plot of a narrative.
Suspense: The tension, uncertainty and anticipation created by withholding information, raising stakes or placing characters in imminent danger. Readers are kept guessing or forced to ask questions.
Syndeton: Literary device through which a sentence’s structure follows the following pattern: A, B and C (or A, B, and C).
Talking-heads syndrome: Dialogue that isn’t grounded in the environment or the characters’ responses to that environment.
Tense: The form a verb takes to indicate when an action happened in relation to the telling of it.
Tension: The emotional strain or suspense created by unresolved conflicts, stakes or uncertainties that keep readers engaged.
Tertiary character: A functional character who gives the story realism and depth, but doesn’t significantly impact on or influence the plot or the development of the other characters.
Theme: The novel’s central idea or message about life, society, or human nature.
Title page: Includes full title (and subtitle if there is one), author’s name, publisher’s name, logo, volume number, and edition.
Transgressor: A character who commits morally, socially, or legally questionable acts.
Tritagonist: Third most important character, who often provide regular emotional or physical support, but don’t determine how the story develops.
Unreliable dialogue: Dialogue that doesn’t match a character’s true voice, mood or intent.
Unreliable narrator: A character whose telling of the story cannot be taken at face value. They may be naïve, confused, or deliberately manipulative.
Verb, intransitive: A verb that doesn’t have a direct object (e.g. ‘I giggled’).
Verb, transitive: A verb that has a direct object (e.g. ‘wrote’ in ‘I wrote a book’).
Verb: A word that describes doing. Can refer to a physical action (e.g. to dig), a mental action (e.g. to wonder) or a state of being (e.g. to be).
Verso: The left-hand page of a book.
Viewpoint: Also point of view or POV. Describes whose head we’re in when we read a book.
Viewpoint character: Also perspective character. The character through whose eyes the story is primarily told, and the narrative lens through which readers experience events, thoughts, and emotions within the story.
Vocative: The form of address for a character directly referred to in dialogue.
Word dump: Also information dump. Information that’s necessary to the story but isn’t artfully delivered, or weaved creatively into the narrative and dialogue.
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Oblivious Guilt Slinging at its finest. With a massive splash of Becoming The Mask. And it keeps going until Le Paradox reveals her secret during All Rolled Up. In case you forgot, that's the tail end of Episode 5.
For context, we see this happen midway through the El Jefe boss fight.
Before the boss fight, Penelope ran off towards the blimp without anyone seeing her. She has a decision to make when she sees Sly and El Jefe having their duel...
Yes, she does end up doing the right thing. She provides aerial support for Sly.
The others are fully aware she's gone missing. Yes, she does get scolded for running off when she comes back... primarily by Bentley. Though she is partially let off the hook for helping Sly.
The fact that she's being targeted by kidnappers doesn't help her case in the slightest.
At least she's only scolded for running off. That definitely beats getting reamed for the act of betrayal... That secret is still safe, BTW.
Time to dive deeper into each of these character arcs. Namely, the lessons our four heroes will need to learn by the end of the story.
I don't need to remind you how poorly written Thieves In Time was. What a storytelling trainwreck.
If Sly 3 was about a seasoned gang of thieves pulling the heist of the century, Thieves In Time Redux is now about a less experienced member learning the ropes and building on her foundations. With, of course, a helping of betrayal mixed in.
Note that Thieves In Time Redux is an AU where Penelope gets dragged into the events of Thieves In Time as a playable character.
First up, Sly.
In canon, Sly jumped into this time travelling adventure because the "old itch" hit him like a truck. We can do better than that. Let's have his initial motivation instead be more about him missing Bentley and Murray. He can still have the itch. But no way is that going to be his number one reason for coming back. Also, when he starts thinking about Penelope now being on the main roster, it leads to him regretting how he ditched all his friends back on Kaine Island...
And when Carmelita comes back for Episode 2, let's just say things won't be pretty... I'm sure you can guess what he needs to do.
Bentley's turn. With Penelope now dragged into the adventure, our favorite turtle now gets a new character arc to navigate.
Bentley is perfectly fine with Sly and Murray risking their lives on the regular... but Penelope, his beloved girlfriend? Not so much. At the beginning of this story, she doesn't have a whole lot of experience yet. The fact that she was nearly kidnapped during the prologue doesn't help. This leads to Bentley being overprotective, but only towards her.
Long story short, Bentley will need to learn to let go of all that fear and let Penelope soar, because spoiler alert! She's actually a badass. It might even save their relationship...
Time to talk about Murray.
Instead of Murray feeling useless from out of heckin' nowhere, he... doesn't have much of an arc to follow. You'd think he'd now have nothing to do, but since Penelope is here for the ride, guess what? Murray has been seeing her as a younger sister. He even goes as far as only calling her "Sis". His focus is now on being a good older brother.
While Murray doesn't get a lot of development here, he does end up being incredibly wholesome.
Which brings us to our main protagonist, Penelope.
I'm not going to reveal her motive here. But I did change it from canon. No longer is she after "something something fame/money/power". As she spends time with our other heroes (and sees how much they care about her), she realizes that her motive isn't worth chasing after.
The lesson she needs to learn is obvious. And it's all about friendship.
I don't even know how to begin covering the ancestors and villains... That'll be for another day. And Carmelita? She's in the same boat.
Thieves In Time could have been so much better. So here. Here's one way it could have gone without ruining the characters.
Flower crowns for flower crimes
Are Penelope's parents still alive and if so, do they approve of Bentley?
Her parents have not met him yet.
Listen to Toad Town - Blue Streamer Removal while reading this.
When it comes to rewriting Thieves In Time, one episode I can't wait to get to is Clan Of The Cave Raccoon.
I get it. Clan Of The Cave Raccoon is nobody's favorite episode. But I believe I know how to fix it.
Many things will stay the same. Our heroes being stranded in prehistory, Carmelita storming off, Bob being the ancestor in need of saving, and The Grizz being our arc villain.
One thing that won't be the same (besides Penelope now being part of the adventure) is how Murray is treated.
I stated earlier that Murray won't be going through much of a character arc in this rewrite.
While that's still true, he will fall into a bit of a depression right after the events of Getting Stronger. Not because of Bob, but because of Penelope.
You see, she's going to be sent out to demonstrate all the things Bob has to do during Getting Stronger. There's just one tiny issue... She's feeling under the weather. Still, she pushes through long enough to get it all done. After the mission is cleared, though... she passes out. Turns out she's not just a little under the weather. She's very sick.
This places our heroine on bed rest for the next several missions as per a very worried Bentley's orders.
It's understandable, then, that Murray would feel partially responsible because Penelope (or Sis as he's been calling her) passed out on his watch.
On Penelope's end, being stuck on bed rest gives her the time she needs to really think about what she's done. I'll briefly go into what leads into her change of heart...
She's seen what her treachery has led to during her journey across time.
She's also seen what her dishonesty could lead to through Sly and Carmelita, especially if she still has the gall to defend herself if she gets found out.
And finally, the boys taking care of her while she's sick ends up being the final push she needs to see the error of her ways.
Oh, and she gets better in time for OP: Jurassic Thievery.
I already spoke about how Sly and Carmelita are doing in this post. They're... worse off than in canon.
Now for the main reason I'm looking forward to this episode... The boss fight.
I've already mentioned the premise in earlier posts: Murray and Penelope team up for a boss fight. Helps that the latter has just gone through her change of heart, and without anybody knowing.
I'm also using the opportunity to follow up on a few things that happened in Episode 2. One of those things is how Bentley has progressed in his character arc.
Last episode, we saw our favorite turtle promise to tone down his overprotectiveness towards Penelope after the events of Jail Break. Before this boss fight starts, we get to see him decide not to interfere. Although maybe letting her (and Murray) fight a giant-ass ice skating bear is a bit much...
Thankfully, his faith in her pays off. But let's go over his thought process throughout that entire scene...
"She can't do this!" "He's going to snap her in half!" "She's doomed!" "Why did I bring her along with us?!"
"No. She can do this." "This amazing woman broke me out of jail and fought off a career pirate!" "She'll be fine." "Why am I doubting her?"
"I promised her." "She deserves my respect." "I'd be lying if I said I wasn't still worried, but… I need to let her soar." "Penelope, show that guy exactly why you're our secret weapon. Our Wild Card. And make me proud."
At around the same time, we have our Villain Of The Week, The Grizz, recognize Penelope. She's shaken, but is able to convince Murray not to believe the villain.
(Not looking forward to writing that scene, BTW. Mainly because of a certain bear's dialogue...)
Seeing Sly, Bentley, Carmelita, and Bob watching this, she convinces Murray to let her finish The Grizz off. He agrees. Now cue what may be one of the biggest missed opportunities in the franchise.
I have to say... This Murray/Penelope boss fight might just end up being my favorite of the lot. I've got a basic outline of how I want the fight scene to go, but actually finishing it might take a while... And yes, there will still be ice skating. From both heroes and our villain.
Anyway, the boss fight ends with Penelope finishing The Grizz off, with help from Murray.
Funny how right when Bentley is learning to let go, Penelope is learning to ask for help when she needs it.
The end of this episode has our heroine, after the van gets fixed, get her chance to return home to Paris. Out of a sense of guilt and responsibility, she refuses, wanting (and perhaps needing) to see this through to the very end.
Our five heroes then set off for their next destination, with Penelope now game for anything this wild adventure has to throw at her.
There she be.
This was one of my first times coloring with a digital tablet. Coloring around the original linework instead of tracing it produces a neat look. But it’s a bit of a pain in the ass to stay within the lines.
Also, I love these two together. And one of Sly 4’s MANY faults was the way it just pretended that their friendship never existed at all. Seriously, screw that stupid game.
Shining Friendship
“The peacemaker among monsters.”
"I'm sorry."
"I just...want to say I'm sorry."
*brings gift* "This is to make up for what I did."
"You're right, it was my fault."
"I have some reparations to make."
"I would like to make it up to you, if you give me a chance."
"I just need one chance. To prove that I truly regret doing what I did."
"Saying sorry does not make me any less smaller. It's just the right thing to do."
"Do you think you could forgive me?"
"You deserve this apology, so take it grandly."
"I will do anything to prove how sorry I am."
*goes to lengths to apologise* "I'm still not done apologising."
"Come with me, please."
"Let me do the right thing."
"You can choose not to accept it. But that doesn't mean I won't do it."
- ashlee