Hell Yeah I've Been Waiting For This Moment To Talk About Character Writing And All That Jazz. I May

Hell Yeah I've Been Waiting For This Moment To Talk About Character Writing And All That Jazz. I May

Hell yeah I've been waiting for this moment to talk about character writing and all that jazz. I may not be a professional writer but...

But...

Anyways so, the way I'd write Emily is to make her at least do more heroic actions and actually be willing to help save Alledia instead of it being some sort of prophecy that makes her into a designated hero. I also want to write in more moments that humanizes her or at least make her somewhat relatable

First off, looking at character she's a bit of a stoic loner with a lot of grief from the death of her father and having the responsibility to save Alledia from the Elf King (even though she's literally a minor). And well... it's alright. I'm not much of a good critic but, I feel like the story doesn't make her feel like the protagonist.

Sure she's the main character, but the story keeps forcing her to be a hero she probably doesn't want to be. She's forced to save a world she wasn't familiar with and was forced to become a member of a guardian council. And even when her character relates to the themes of grief and not being alone both themes are sort of thrown out the window in supernova (especially the not being alone part because not everyone can solve their problems with their future selves).

But if I want to get to rewriting Emily's character I'd also have to rewrite a few things in the story. To start, let Emily become more interactive with her family. She could have more times where she'd talk to Navin, maybe they could either have more time bonding together since the theme of siblinghood sorta just faded a bit as the series went on. Maybe have more moments where they work together fighting enemies (that titan scene in book 2 is a good example but I wished I had more). Have moments where they bicker and argue and maybe have some tension with each other but let them get along and understand each other more in the end. Let them both have more moments with their mother too and show why their bonds are so strong apart from just by blood.

And especially this, let Emily also have a found family with other characters. Let Miskit be like a mentor and possible big brother-like figure to her (and lemme rewrite Miskit into being actually useful and use the damn info he got from Silas). Let Leon also be like a mentor to her (and maybe have Miskit and Leon have a rivalry on who's the better stonekeeper teacher). Let Emily learn more about the word of Alledia from Enzo and Rico (they could be like her uncles even). If family is important, then found family could also be a great addition to its theme.

Next, let Emily become more active in the story. Show the audience that she's worthy of being a hero by writing her to do heroic things not because she has to but because she wants to. Let her take some time to save other civilians in danger, such as in book 2 where she could have saved other civilians from the Elf soldiers while the clinic was under attack. I don't want to sound too pushy but I wish she was written with more agency as a character. Maybe there could even be a moment where she is allowed to have a choice between going back to Earth or staying at Alledia instead of some strange stonekeeper curse. But instead of choosing to go back to Earth, she wants to stay because she genuinely wants to help Alledia stop the Elf King (and later that stupid swirly voice guy). And relating to the theme of family before, let her stay in Alledia because she's made more bonds and friends/family there than on Earth and she doesn't want to lose them just like she lost her father.

Speaking of loss, let the truth of the stone come out quicker, the truth that she can't bring her father back from the death. Let her accept overtime that even if her father was gone, she can't bring him back. Even if time travel existed (which I really wish it wasn't but oh well thanks supernova) let Emily realise that she can't change the past without dire consequences. But let her know that she isn't alone. That she could still talk to others about her grief and about her past life before all these Alledia shenanigans. That even if her father's gone, he would've been proud of her and he has lived his best life with her and her family.

Finally, her loneliness and also her friendships. I feel like her friendship with Trellis should have a little more utilization, such as giving them time to bond together as not just allies (as in people that work together because they have too) but as friends. Let them share their feelings together, let Trellis even bond with her family and let Emily bond with Luger a bit (even though I don't like him a lot tbh). And when the time comes, let their friendship save them from certain doom. From Emily saving Trellis in book 5, to Trellis saving Emily in book 8 (instead of her future self because it came out of nowhere and undermines the themes of the books booo).

In conclusion... I think I may have gone too far. I may have had a few wonky and weirdly written paragraphs here and there but it's almost midnight and I forgot that I have to sleep for school. I'm sorry that I wrote a little too much I went overboard with the rewrites and stuff. Anyways, I hope you enjoyed this, I try to put a lot of thought into this essay... reblog... whatever it's called

Question to fans: We don't know much about Emily, how would you develop her as a character?

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11 months ago

Emily || Trellis

Obligatory Hades game x Amulet series crossover? YES. I LOVE THIS GAME.

Edited by @/tacehxilef on instagram. Art and voice work by me. Pose from wha. Video credit. I don't own the game (no money, but I've been watching playthroughs) so apologies if it's not too accurate, but we tried our best!

Emily portrait below!

Emily || Trellis

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1 month ago
Happy Easter!!

Happy Easter!!


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1 year ago
I Remember I Drew Some Emily Redesigns But I Got Too Lazy To Color Them So They're Just Blank For Now.
I Remember I Drew Some Emily Redesigns But I Got Too Lazy To Color Them So They're Just Blank For Now.

I remember I drew some Emily redesigns but I got too lazy to color them so they're just blank for now. Imagine that most of the color palette is in warmer colors. Also please ignore the unnecessary drawings I totally didn't do those parts


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1 year ago

You know what would be really cool? If his motives for driving stonekeepers insane and stuff was not for serving a different species (looking at you, you creepy ass shadows) but something more malicious.

TW: Genocide

Lemme explain, so in my headcanon I thought the Voice caused people to go mad and become monsters to cause destruction but only to their own species or people protecting them. This is because the Voice wants a superior species living on Alledia. Other previous species have gone extinct by previous stonekeepers that lost themselves and unknowingly genocides their own people.

The Voice is like a toxic parent to Alledia, wanting the best for it but in its own twisted ways. I also headcanon humans to be rare in Alledia because of the curse that turns some into animal-like species (that Ikol still doesn't like) and also because of other human stonekeepers the Voice had turned mad. The Voice will only accept a species he thinks is best for Alledia, to preserve its planet while also having lifeforms in it.

Also, each species in Alledia isn't native to the planet at all, because the motherstone was the one that created the portals to other planets that other people went into. And after pieces of it was borrowed the motherstone grew weaker until the portals started to close. Ikol as a part of the motherstone became well, the voices to every stonekeeper and corrupted them to turn on their own kind. And when all the stones have been released from their deceased masters, the motherstone will join again and open up the portals leading to Alledia, thus restating the process of finding a superior species... until a certain group of shadows came in secret

And that's basically how I would've written Ikol, just a picky and evil spirit of the stones that manipulates and watches over the planet until it finds a species it prefers on it. Almost like a collector of toys that throws away stuff they don't want later on until it finds something they favor and decides "welp, I don't wanna play with theses anymore" *throws away rest of the Alledians.

I wished he was more interesting to the story but alas, he's was a servant to the shadows and probably isn't gonna be fought or anything. But he could've been scarier, he could've been like a villain you get anxiety from every time they're on screen. He could've been a nightmare to deal with, just not in the annoying way

Any thoughts on Ikol? He’s a bit confusing to me

*grasps your shoulder* I don't get Him either.

Controversial thoughts below:

The Voice is unnecessary as a character.

Unpopular af opinion I know. The Voice was a charismatic character and pretty much the lynchpin on why Emily came to Alledia but listen. He's a tumor on the story. There can be another alternative that could push her to go to Alledia. If he was done well then maybe yes he could've been the horror and mystery factor the story had but no. More often than not he's pretty much the default reason why characters get absolved of their actions bc "wah they were influenced by the Voice that's why he was pushed to transform into a giant" wenk wenk that's kinda boring I say. Where's the agency. He's basically just a really loud conscience/impulsive or intrusive thought turned into an entity. People already do that themselves. Like the entire premise is already terrifying enough on its own. Idk. Maybe it's bc I'm already viewing it as an already older person lens that I can't seem to incorporate the more lighthearted part of the kid's fantasy but seriously. A dark entity can make things interesting I guess but ngl people can already be horrible people on their own. No dark spirit required. It's already about war and tyranny. It's already about putting power and responsibilities and blame on already fragile shoulders. It's about adults who failed children. Wouldn't be more interesting if they focused on characters with autonomy who fucked up and then explores on how those mistakes affect everyone else.

Agh fuck I know the story is also trying to discuss abt fate and choices and whether or not a person has the freedom to make those choices and actions and it's about defiance against that helplessness, but my main complaint about the characters is that they have zero fucking agency. They don't push the plot at all. The plot just happens. It's so ironic for a series that's supposed to be a celebration of that defiance have a protagonist that is only is what she is and does things she does because she feels like she has to be and has its entire plot crumble in on itself by characters that are treated not as characters but just paper maches. What then.


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1 year ago

Hell yeah trans rights!

Right, considering the current state of corporate politics on this site, and that it seems that only those affected seem to be actively speaking on the matter, it is up to I, the only fucking cishet on tumblr, to drag this out to a wider audience.

Right, Considering The Current State Of Corporate Politics On This Site, And That It Seems That Only

REBLOG IF YOUR ACCOUNT IS A TRANSFEM SAFE SPACE.

We need to show these higher ups how much we truly value them.


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1 year ago

Welp, krilling the world it is then

Welp, Krilling The World It Is Then

I hate/love splatoon 3 I have not won a single splatfest and if someone says "haha skill issue" I am going to krill you then myself. We are running out of splatfests to play in and there's nothing I can do but suffer, eat octopi, suffer, eat squids, and cry. Anyways team save the world if we don't win we might as well end the world

1 year ago

If I had the ability I'd make an animated adaption of the Amulet series, albeit with some new stuff added for context and better world+character building and some old stuff removed because god damn it I'm sorry but I hate the part where Emily's FUTURE SELF WHICH JUST CAME OUT OF NOWHERE AND HELPS HER INSTEAD OF TRELLIS. It makes me want to drop myself into the void. Like, there's so many potential and cool ideas in this comic that either gets written poorly or abandoned in the end. But then again there's a chance I'd butcher the entire plot so badly it'll look a mutilated chew toy so I should probably not take any chances for now


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